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For as many applicants as possible, I draft the first part of your Statement completely free of charge to promote my service. More than half of these applicants decide to commission me to finish drafting the entire statement. This is how I support myself and my only child Davy Dylan, laying a little something aside for his future. 

drrobertedinger@gmail.com

Bachelors Degree, General Studies, NYC

March 30, 2016


I was raised by a pair of doctors in Uzbekistan. My mother is a cardiologist and my father is a neurosurgeon. As a result, I was always encouraged to believe that becoming a doctor was for me the most natural course in the world. As four out of five of my aunts are also MDs and a fifth has a PHD in Microbiology, I have become most accustomed over the years to medical discussions whenever our family has been together.

Since our permanent relocation to America four years ago, when I was 16, I have been studying the university system so as to learn how to best make my dream of becoming a physician a reality. XXXX is my first choice to prepare myself for medical school since I so admire the breadth and vast creativity of your course offerings, eclectic, interdisciplinary; XXXX is the perfect place to study developments on the cutting edge of medical research.

I put a lot of special effort into my science classes in High School because I knew that biology would be the focal center of my university studies; and I finished high school at 16, right before moving to America. Due to financial considerations, however, I was unable to go directly to a university and I began studying at a community college, biology, chemistry, etc. My favorite course so far has been molecular genetics. I am enthralled by scientific learning

I feel strongly that medicine represents my moral heritage, my most prized possession; ultimately, it is what I have been bequeathed by my family. I have learned from day one that the epiphany of human satisfaction is only found in service to others. Doctors in Uzbekistan are not well paid as they are in America. While few medical professional in my home country are especially happy about their miserable salaries, this does help to foster and perpetuate a high caliber of physician, someone who finds caring for others to be their natural destiny and spiritual calling rather than simply one of the most lucrative options available. Long before my mother had any idea that she would end up immigrating to America, she was the only member of the family who ever had much to say about the low pay of our doctors. She once suggested that I might want to consider another career choice that would be better paid. She would tell me that medicine was the best, but we just live in the wrong country.

My devotion to a life of service to humankind runs in my family. On moral, emotional, and social levels, I enjoy helping people; and it is conversation about health issues to which I am best attuned. I am more capable in the physical sciences, especially biology, than I am in other areas. I feel strongly that I am programmed to excel in this area because it represents the compelling center of all of my interests as they come together. I believe that I can be successful even in a most competitive environment such as XXXX, which draws many of the best young minds on a global level, because of my intense passion for science. This is why I have my heart set on attending what is arguably the finest university in the world.

A profound love and a determination to do everything that I can to care for the health and well being of my community is the social and professional role for which I have long been groomed.  I am the kind of young man who always strives to bring joy to the people that surround me; and I have always imagined that my destiny would be to do this as a doctor. These days, I have the normal concerns of someone who is 20 years old and I have traveled much of the world and speak four languages with facility. But it is biology that gets my attention. It is my favorite mystery, the world where I have felt most intellectually at home for some time. My parents were divorced when I was still quite young. Things were difficult for my mother, a single mom in a very patriarchal, Muslim society. Nevertheless, she managed to invest a great deal of time and energy in the education of her two children; this is why I was able to graduate at only 16. I was also a competitive swimmer who met with some success in high school.

I have become a walking celebration of diversity over the course of the last four years. First of all, I had the marvelous stroke of luck that my sister decided to study in Slovenia and she invited me to join her. I was able to spend almost two years learning Slovene; it is now my fourth language after Uzbek, Russian and English. And I met fascinating people from all over the world while exploring about much of Eastern Europe. Along the way, I visited numerous hospitals. I only regret that I was unable to volunteer at any one place because I kept moving, wanting to see it all. During this period, my dream of becoming a doctor in the USA began to gain a great deal of steam. America has the best, most cutting edge medical technology. And I want very much to be trained in a state-of-the-art institution.

Just before leaving Uzbekistan, I was afflicted with my own health issue, a rare skin abnormality that doctors did not seem to know how to identify, much less cure. I do not know to this day precisely what it was; thankfully it has gone away. The important thing has been the incredible learning experience that I have enjoyed, visiting dermatologists in several countries over the course of several years, all of whom did the best they could with what they had to help me. I found them all to be a profound inspiration each in their own way. I have come to better appreciate from this experience how a doctor’s job is never easy. It is always challenging to always remain positive and never give up.      

While I was living in Europe, my mom moved to the U.S. One year after that I joined her. As new immigrants, the first thing that we had to do was to get jobs. Naturally, I looked for something that was health-care related. I was anxious to learn about the American health care system. Soon, I found myself working as a pharmacy technician and in this position I have learned a great deal about the challenges facing patient care in the US. Soon, we were stable enough economically so that I could enroll at XXXX County College.

Throughout the course of my studies, I have become increasingly enamored with molecular biology and biochemistry. I also really enjoyed my chemistry classes and also have developed a passion for learning how chemical pathways work on humans.  Ultimately, I think my professional interests may well come to rest in the study and practice of gene therapy—the primary area that I have identified as holding special promise for our medical tomorrow. I have been amazed at how this relatively new field of genetics has grown over the last few years and I am excited about how much that is still awaiting discovery. This is why I want to concentrate my studies at XXXX in biochemistry. It is in this area, along with genetics, that I hope to make my mark in the long term.

Living in New York City has been another of my long standing dreams, and is another reason why I have chosen to apply to XXXX University. Most of all, however, it is the fact that a lot of genetic researchers are XXXX graduates, such as Thomas Hunt Morgan and Walter Sutton. They have contributed so much into genetics and have changed the face of modern medicine. I see XXXX as a springboard to scientific greatness and I would be so proud to count myself among its alumni.

Despite the fact that I am still only 20, I feel strongly that I have unique life experiences which will help me to make unique contributions to the diversity of your student body. I feel that my trajectory has been non-traditional and I appreciate the way in which the School Of General Studies is designed specifically for non-traditional students with broad-based academic backgrounds.

My character is typified by my professional dreams, and curing AIDS has been my daydream since early adolescence. Part of that dream has entailed an elevating consciousness concerning the need to make these treatments available to all who need them. I follow progress being made to fight AIDS in Africa in great detail, and this struggle inspires me to very much look forward to volunteer work in the future on an international level. I also plan to stay connected for many years with the academic world. I hope to teach at some point in my career. It would be a special honor for me at some point to be able to teach basic biology and chemistry courses at the university level. Most of all, I am certain that I will remain engaged as long as I live with research that has life saving potential.

I very much hope to be one of the few students from XXXX County College that is able to transfer to XXXX each year. Our college has a connection with XXXX and these students are able to transfer about 50 credits on average. For me XXXX is a big step. It is a symbol of the ideal that nothing is unreachable. I love almost everything about New York City, most of all, its sheer enormity. XXXX’s campus is my favorite spot to visit. There, I feel a sense of balance and purpose in life. I would love to make XXXX the center of my world, taking full advantage of surrounding resources for learning about developments in medicine. I am also most impressed with the research trajectories of XXXX faculty, and keenly look forward to attending lectures of renowned researchers from all over the world.

XXXX is a special symbol of opportunity for me. I am enamored by the fact that you were the first University in the United States to offer the M.D. program. I appreciate how research is the lifeblood of your institution and how you attract countless brilliant students who represent some of the best minds on earth and have won all sorts of awards. As a recent immigrant, I am hungry for achievement. I want to achieve as much as possible because I was given the opportunity to do so.

Currently I live in XXXX, New Jersey but I want to move to NYC and find a place to live. I feel strongly that the time that I would have to spend commuting could be put to much better use on campus. I want to thank you for your attention to my application.

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