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Sample Cardiology Fellowship Program Personal Statement, Indian Doctor

Now 31, I came to America from my native India at the age of 15, first completed high school, then college, and finally medical school in the Caribbean, going on to pass all three steps of my USMLE on the first attempt. Even before I finished medical school, I found myself reading in my spare time about Cardiology and I have known for a long time that it is to this area of medicine that I want to give my all for the balance of my professional life - as both a doctor caring for patients and as a physician heavily engaged in research. I keenly look forward to a lifetime of investigation on the cutting edge of study in Cardiology, new techniques, technological advancements, etc. I was persistent and confident in my career choice of medicine and I consistently received honors for my academic excellence as a medical student at Ross University en the island of Dominica, especially in physiology, biochemistry, and pharmacology. For these reasons, I hope to be given the opportunity to prove myself and to give my all to the advancement of Cardiology in your distinguished Fellowship Program.

After graduating from medical school, I completed a clerkship at New York Methodist Hospital in Brooklyn, where I encountered a wide array of diseases and pathologies that compelled and fascinated me to no end. I have always been grateful for the opportunity that I had to work closely with Dr. XXXX, a Cardiologist. Standing alongside Dr. XXXX was a defining moment in my career development; he stands among my foremost role models and is someone who I deeply admire and find enormously inspiring. Another of my foremost mentors in medicine who has inspired me greatly and encouraged me along the way was Dr. XXXX, a gifted cardiologist, and my mentor at XXXX University Medical Center, where I completed my residency in internal medicine (07/2012 - 06/2015). We worked together on several poster presentations and, in particular, collaborated on a study of the quality improvements that were needed for our Department of Cardiology.

In July of 2015, I became the Chief Resident of the XXXX Telemetry Unit at the XXXX Center and served in this position for one year – providing me with the opportunity to practice clinically at the same time that I stay heavily engaged with research. My primary responsibilities included making the rounds to get to know the new patients admitted to Telemetry and CCU, working closely with attending Cardiology faculty. I also collaborated with the cardiology outpatient and congestive heart failure clinic, working with patients with everything from acute coronary syndrome to arrhythmia and advanced heart failure. I covered the other rotating cardiology fellows as needed, helping with consults, echocardiograms, stress tests, cardiac catheterizations, electrophysiology studies, pacemaker/ICD implants, and the interpretation of nuclear stress tests.

Outside of these clinical duties, I conduct studies in basic science and clinical research with Dr. XXXX, Chief of Cardiology at the XXXX. As my mentor and program director, our current research focus involves studying neonatal rat ventricular myocyte monolayer as a viable model for in vivo physiology. Running the lab and carrying out experiments on a weekly basis, we are also trying to create new methods using stem cells in monolayer optical mapping. I have worked on several research projects with Dr. El-Sherif and Dr. Natarajan, who is on the research faculty of NYU School of Medicine. My position as telemetry chief resident position has enabled me to grow rapidly professionally and come to a much fuller understanding of the complexity of cardiac patient management in outpatient as well as inpatient settings.

Born and raised in a small village in India, the specter of suffering was a constant. As I went to school each day, I could not help but notice the thin, slight, elderly men and women, on their sun baked stoops, wracked in pain. As I entered adolescence, my life was upended with no warning when my father suddenly died. My mother became our emotional rock, which is why the devastation was beyond words when I learned, at 19, of her diagnosis with advanced stage cancer. Beyond the overwhelming fears, there was the reality of family need. I was pursuing my undergraduate studies and working full-time as a pharmacy technician. Having come to the United States, I was working as I never had before. After earning my BS in Biochemistry from Temple University, I started working as chemist. Yet, deep within, I began questioning myself, wondering if I could do more.  Later that year, inspired by the plight of the underserved, especially in my country of origin, India, my mother’s illness, and my growing passion for scientific research, I decided to attempt a career in medicine. I scored a 90th percentile overall on the MCAT, which would have been higher if it had not been for my subpar performance on verbal reasoning - since English is for me a second language. This helps to explain why I ended up going to medical school outside of the USA. Since then, my English has continued to improve.

I feel very lucky to be able to practice in a profession that allows me to explore my fascination with the human heart while getting the satisfaction of helping people to live longer, more fulfilling lives. Currently serving as a hospitalist in the Department of Cardiology at XXXX Hospital in Connecticut, I learn more and more about Cardiology every day, attending to patients with a wide variety of cardiac pathologies and gaining additional valuable experience in cardiac management. I have also volunteered as a fellow in heart failure and transplantation so as to learn how to more effectively manage advanced heart failure patients, especially with the support of mechanical circulatory devices. Now, I hope to become a transplant fellow for the upcoming academic year. I look forward to being a part of your cardiology fellowship program and demonstrating to the fullest extent my determination, hard work, and commitment to patient well-being as a member of your distinguished team.

I thank you for considering my application.

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As a specialist in the area of diversity, I find particular joy in helping to foster the representation of all ethnicities in our medical institutions. I think it is not only healthy for America to have a medical staff that was born all over the world, but it is also healthy for the planet. For over a decade, I have helped thousands of residents struggling to write their own statement in English as a second or foreign language, something that can be enormously difficult. Please let me help! You need a very well written, eloquent statement in order to be accepted. Much of your competition uses professional help, which gives them an edge. It would be prudent for you to get help as well.

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Sample Personal Statement for a Fellowship in Endocrinology

Originally from Colombia where I completed medical school, I am now in my third year of my residency program in Internal Medicine here in the USA. I am especially well versed and experienced in the treatment of metabolic diseases and I find a great deal of satisfaction helping sick people, especially the elderly.

Nothing brings me as much joy as seeing patients fully recover as a result of receiving the appropriate, integral treatment. I am especially concerned with diseases such as diabetes that is reaching epidemic proportions in many parts of the world. I hope to specialize in the area of Endocrinology primarily so as to continue to learn everything that I can about Diabetes and its consequences for a variety of systems such as heart, kidneys, and nervous systems. Since medical school, I have been extremely fascinated by and heavily engaged with endocrinology, especially thyroid disease. The part of Colombia that I come from has a very high incidence of goiter and both of my own grandmothers suffered from this disease; one of them is a thyroid cancer survivor. I was especially excited when I began my first rotation in the Endocrinology Clinic because I knew that I would have the opportunity to gain a lot of exposure in thyroid disease; I particularly enjoyed the opportunity to perform FNA biopsies.

I am now really exciting about the prospect of learning about hormone axis, Hypothalamic-pituitary thyroid, suprarenal, reproductive, etc. The relationship between diabetes and obesity is another area where I seek to develop special expertise. Here in my residency position, I am practicing in a hospital where kidney disease is very common and the main etiology for it is diabetes. I am saddened to see so many patients having to go through hemodyalisis and its all-too-frequent complications. Patients with ESRD always touch my heart in special ways. My passion for endocrinology also involves fighting kidney disease since preventing diabetes also helps to prevent kidney disease. This keeps me excited each and every opportunity that I have to help educate I do so, helping patients to control weight, preventing diabetes and metabolic syndromes. In the future, I want to have the opportunity to combine Endocrinology with endeavors in the sphere of Public Health – in a constant quest to prove outcomes in the prevention and treatment of diabetes and obesity. 

I am most pleased that so many of the medically underserved here in the USA speak my maternal language, since I love helps patients practicing medicine in Spanish. My parents were important role models who always encouraged me to excel and to distinguish myself in service to the community. As soon as I finished medical school in Colombia I was off to a rural area serving in a small town, after I practiced emergency medicine along with both inpatient and outpatient medicine. I went on to spend a total of 4 years as an ER physician in Colombia and it was here that my special passion for metabolic disease took shape. One of the principle reasons that I came to the USA was to learn as much as I could in the most advanced environment possible, especially in the exciting area of endocrinology.

I have a great passion for medicine and extensive clinical experience that I firmly believe would make me an asset to your team if I were to be selected for a fellowship position in Endocrinology. I thank you for considering my application to your distinguished fellowship program.

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Sample 1st Paragraph for Ophthalmology Residency, Iranian

By the time that I finished medical school in my native Iran in 1999, I had already been fully convinced for some time that my calling was in Ophthalmology. Soon, I completed a fellowship in virtreoretinal surgery at my alma matar, Iran’s University of Medical Science. I hope to be accepted to a residency position in the USA in Ophthalmology on the basis of the fact that I have recent experience in the USA, having completed a fellowship in uveitis and ocular immunology at the XXXX Eye Research and Surgery Institution. This experience has resulted in my being exceptionally well prepared with a great deal to offer to your institution, especially in the area of cataract surgery.

Those applicants who demonstrate that they are caring people, sociable, agreeable, and team players, have a clear advantage. Professionals in Medical Residency are no exception, and they serve as especially important role models to the next generation. It is important that you submit an eloquent essay that successfully conveys to the admissions committee the specific assets, gifts, and relevant experience that you have had, so that they are convinced that you are a competitive candidate for admission. We help develop the material that you submit into the kind of essay where admissions committee members feel like they already know you a little bit and look forward to meeting you in person and working with you in their program.

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